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You call whenever it suits you best,
I have only your best interest in mind
Yet you abuse your rights, your brain’s arrest,
Still you think the way you do, remaining blind.
You wonder if the glass is half empty or
Half full when the glass is simply half filled,
And still you have questions, making your mind soar;
Can you smile on the wrong side of your face? Thrilled
With finding the answers to vacant visions,
So you’re ignorant of me, as you tread
An endless path of mindless decisions
And together it’s these thoughts you do thread
When you finally are stricken so stiff,
Revealing that the centre of life is if.  
©2008-2009 ~DYBIM
:icondybim:

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The correct title for this is (?) but, of course, dA had a seizure when I tried to add that as a title.

This was my second ever attempt at a sonnet.
I found it stupidly difficult to write ><
Next step - a villanelle. That could be fun xD

Anyway. Have a chain of thought =p
It's not great, and I don't particularly like it as it doesn't flow very well (any suggestions of how I might change this would be great...hint) but it's something different.

So...enjoy =3

<3

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Nice work! I like the subject.

I know what you mean about sonnets. It's killer but if you ever get REALLY bored... :P

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:icondybim:
Awww thank you! Really appreciate the feedback =]

It was stupidly annoying to write ><

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Don't Cry Because It's Over, Smile Because It Happened.

~GGDFC

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